From the shots we took on Tuesday and the shots we took today, Nathan edited all of the shots and added some ambient thriller music to give us an idea of what the outcome will be when we finally edit it completely.
Here is the first draft.
Yes there are several things we need to do/change, but this will be good for us to work towards our goal.
* Please watch it in 720p if possible for better quality. If your computer cannot handle it, please use 420p.
Review: after showing many people our opening sequence we got a clear idea of what we need to improve and re-shoot, all of the people we asked to watch the film liked the concept and understood what was happening.
They said the kidnapping scene was a bit weak and we need to put more emphasis on the drama and action in the shots. Also we would need to improve the drama in the cellar where Nathan is banging on the door; the reason he did it quietly was because we didn't want people to think we were in trouble or injured.
The blood effect we used didn't work out as well as expected when we watched it back, so to show the audience tat this is blood we are thinking of adding a close up of the blood and making it a lot darker in colour.
We are planning to re-shoot on Wednesday 12th January but it is dependent on the weather conditions.
Well done on getting a speedy rough cut. I'll try and recap my comments from class -
ReplyDelete- opening tilt shot of church - maybe could be a bit smoother? It jerks a little - does it do this in the original?
- change the text message - this feels out of character - maybe a simpler "see you later at Joe's party" kind of message?
- the bagging? does this need a little more emphasis for drama? do you need a few more shots or cut small bits out to give it a jerky, bitty feel or slowmo? Worth experimenting!
- blood in cellar scene - needs to look like blood
- when the hood comes off, do we need a few close-ups showing a bit more facial expression??? Nathan seems particularly unfazed by it all. This does not mean go into overact mode though!
- the door bashing and call for help could be more vigorous?
- the end - gets a bit confusing and needs a bit more of a definite end to it...any ideas?
- the music could be stronger/ better at creating atmosphere
- think about how and where to add the titles? Can you be creative with them?
- fine editing - look at cutting to create more tension and suspense
There are some good shots ( I like the close-ups of the bound wrists)and I like the slow but clear use of camera shots at the start as the protagonist walks into the alley.
You could do with getting maybe 10 other people to view and comment on this edit - ask them what the story is, what ideas about characters they get from this, what it makes them want to know, what shots they like, anything they don't like or that confuses them, would they watch on and why.... Asking specific questions will elicit more useful feedback than a vague "do like it then?". Collate this in a post and formulate what you need to do next to improve this further!
Do you need to add something about your intentions for the music?
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